Note: I used to sometimes write poetry with elaborate rhyme schemes, and this is a good example of one (the scheme being ABACCDDBEEFGGF). Again this piece is not autobiographical; it is purely imagined; but hopefully it has an authentic feel all the same.
The night was very beautiful; I watched you entranced, as a child watches clouds in the sky; I was more than in love, and sorrowful too, I felt if I touched you, you would like sand slip through my fingers, not able to stand the pressure of intimacy, my gaze's intensity; your skin was so pale, perhaps the simile was milk, like mortification, a sad goodbye dripping from my fingers, the aftermath of a foolish fantasy, a ripped photograph one carries around, one hopes to reassemble the pieces, rewind the falling milk back into the jug, the curves of silk, but knowing fixed things can only resemble.
It was a summer night; you were in bra and panties blacker than the firmament, my hand on your shoulder, you chose a star to stake your life on; my eyes chose your left breast, to treasure through lows, to worship on the darkest days, to cup like the horizon the sun, swallowed up by my hands' possession of it, the scent of an unknown perfume rising to my nose. Soon the sublime days will come to a close: you will have known I cherished you; your body assaulted by disease and decay, will retain its dignity, the cool memory of my hands on it, will render it anew.
The stars and moon are brighter tonight; this is our last night together, lovers who have never known lust, whose light is more pure than the aura of a saint; our love for one another's without taint, only tenderness has passed my lips, dear, as our bodies crushed every neurotic fear, I knew only you, only your long fingers could fit my body's holes, its contours, and I dreamt of us on fragrant shores, running into royal blue waves, so alive, no-one could invade our earthly paradise, only one another fill our pristine eyes, and our lips alone could help us survive.
But the night always fades, like my memories; the marriage we knew in the firmament breaks apart with the original continent, and the day bathes in light its separate bodies.
Very well put together! I am impressed by the structure, and found the content to seem authentic. The second verse helped with this, I think. I saw what you saw...and loved it.
Brilliant. Not all poetry has to be biographical, most of mine are not - just thoughts and wants, and dreams and such. It's great to meet another writer who can pull so much vision from something that hasn't happened, or isn't happening. Tip O' The Hat to you. ~Lady Poe
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This is a nifty little piece of work you got here. The first part of the middle stanza seems to ground itself much more than the rest of the work, but as much as that's a tone shift, it also instills more palpable meaning into the rest of the poem. So yeah, I think this thing is very well put together. Nice work!
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