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Athena


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He said -

I will light the sky with stars
until you finally see.

Give Heaven color and mountains
stone.

Holding open my palm
I offer you the world.

Please, my darling, won't you
fall in love with me?

She said -

I will.


Athena.

-- Edited by Athena at 17:10, 2007-07-26

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kutipi2


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Very sweet poem Athena :) I loved it, from the lovely imagery to the tone to the passion. :D

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Thank you, kindly.
I have made a minor adjustment - spare of the moment add on, if you will.

Athena.

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very sweet add on :)

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Yes, this is very sweet. heavenly.

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Great twist on the whole "he said, she said" idea. Nice and short and to the point. Good work.

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Good Morning, so gorgeously light, heavenly.
Simple and to the point, yet awash with
beautifully descriptive images.

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very sweet writing here athena :) i dont mean to copy the others but it is... i liked it very much :)

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