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!RAW!


!RAW!

Thats how you felt,
you said
When I chose to walk away.
I finally saw
what you were up to
Through the pain
And in my weakness,
I needed someone,
But,
You were the wrong one.
In the beginning,
I couldnt see
Your clever manipulation..
your sympathetic words..
You seized me
with your cunning mind.
You finally had me wrapped
In layers of self-doubt.
I was losing me
I had no place to hide..
except in fitful moments
of sleep
You pushed me into
a corner,
Surrounded by
a barbed wire of lies
and promises.

You nearly had me..
You nearly gained complete control
Over my frantic mind..

But, I didnt give in
I wouldnt let you
And with the tiny vestige
of strength
that remained
I turned away
And found the path
I walk along right now
With no fear of shadows
and of you

I hope I have finally banished you
With these words
I want no more of you
Just... go

©Sally Clarke 2008

This has taken me four years but I've finally put "pen" to "paper" !!!



-- Edited by The Dreamstress at 04:54, 2008-06-01

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damn girl.

I am not only shocked but impressed with this write. So very full of emotion, and Raw is the perfect title for it. from start to finish you deliver, with purpose, with poise, with a gentle elegance that is clearly you.

I hope this allowed you to be free from the burdens that are clearly inscribed within each line.

Beautiful work, m'dear. Beautiful.

Love,
~Poe

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Sally, this was incredible! It seemed like someone yelling their inner thoughts in order to finally give themselves some peace from a horrific event.

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