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Planet of Dreams


When the world is cast
Amongst silver hues and stars
We are not part of
The Earth, but rather we fly
To some far off land
An abyss of mirages
Tangled in our mind
Between the clouds and the truth


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Natural and earthy.. Gorgeous from start to finish.

You make grasping a new style of poetry seem so easy!!

This one earns a Big ol' WOW.... I simply love this one... Very much.

Kudos,
~Lady Poe

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Aw! Thank you Poe for your kindness. It's just a simple little poem really. But thank you. I appreciate it. :)

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Well drat...I noticed that I messed up. I ended with a 5 syllable-7 syllable instead of 7-7. Oh well...I must fix that...

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When the world is cast
Amongst silver hues and stars
We are not part of
The Earth, but rather we fly
To some far off land
An abyss of mirages
Tangled in our minds somewhere
Between the clouds and the truth


- all changed now :)

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"Our mothers and fathers held us close to their hearts and they promised 'One bright and shining day my children, we will triumph in battle. One bright and shining day my children, we will give you back your wings.' " - PL: S&W


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This is the first Choka that I have read ...I closed my eyes and picked....this is beautiful....it sails between the mysterious and the magical....and I love it.

Lovely job!

Dreamstress x

P.S. Now off to have a look at the others.... (smile)

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Yes you do. :) Thank you very much for your comment. Very much appreciated as always. :)

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"Our mothers and fathers held us close to their hearts and they promised 'One bright and shining day my children, we will triumph in battle. One bright and shining day my children, we will give you back your wings.' " - PL: S&W
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