The golden cloak of Lady Autumn Whispers to the ground Leaving sensuous outlines Half forgotten Through the summer months And landscapes open up Revealed once more By the naked trees As they stand proud Displaying their unclothed beauty For all the world to see
I believe it's quite extraordinary! I can't find a tree replacement word, but I believe it's quite well placed, doesn't really need a fancy substitute. but do what you want :) it's important for the author to be satisfied with the final results he reaches. beautiful picture too keep us amazed :D
I think trees fits just well... it's a simple little word that blends in leaving the gem phrases bright and vibrantly standing out... Love it. ~Lady Poe
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"..I don't care for your fairytales... - Sara Bareilles
Wow...that was so gorgeous! As Poe said, the words were very vibrant and very elegant. :) Loved it as always. :D
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"Our mothers and fathers held us close to their hearts and they promised 'One bright and shining day my children, we will triumph in battle. One bright and shining day my children, we will give you back your wings.' " - PL: S&W
