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A Distant Cry (Random Crap, completely remodeled)


Follow me into obscenity
A darker road to poetry
For where I land is where I fall
Wherever I roam, I am appalled
By all the bloody scenery
I really miss the greenery

A planet fallen to ash and dust
From whence we came-
is where we must
Return in the end
A package unsent
For all our modern will is bent
Away from the earth's care
We leave our soul's bare

Forget the mild anxiety
Enter up a wild plea
Search all around for sanity
But finding mostly vanity
Surrounds me like an army
My wounds seem paltry
Compared to a bleeding world
Through time and space hurled

When will we drop the bitterness
Return to earth our sweet carress
Rid ourselves of carelessness
And also leave behind our selfishness
Another testament to human endevours
Leaving only a sadistic trail of feathers

Return to planet earth
Help us all find rebirth
For death is a shroud
Of which I am not proud
Return to planet earth
Find out what it is worth
The value of the earth

-- Edited by SoulsParadise at 12:45, 2007-10-18

-- Edited by SoulsParadise at 19:07, 2007-10-19

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Random Crap


Vanilla Ice! You used him as a reference! hahaha..

This reminds me back when I first started reading your work on TPS... That rapper meets poet version of Poetry battles. Do you still visit that site?

I like the first stanza. I'm not one for modern poetry, but I do like aggressive writing, and this has plenty of it!

Enjoyed.

~Lady Poe

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well it's pretty honest
kinda... boasting and... idk, it's clear you've been influenced by rappity-rap freestyle forum battles attitude
it's okay, for your own taste, I don't disagree or march against it
just not my cup of ... Hennessey
keep it up, roll towards more profound material and show us what really lies inside of you

holla

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