Hold me closely Feel me gently Turn me slowly Stroke me lightly Fill me deeply Kiss me softly Watch me clearly Touch me wildly Need me badly Trust me wholly Want me gladly Know me......... truly
Dreamstress x
(another one from the files!)
-- Edited by The Dreamstress at 13:17, 2007-10-10
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"Sweet is the dream, divinely sweet, when absent souls in fancy meet."
Edgar Allan Poe
very nice this pattern couldn't fail even if you didn't add the last line, but with it really jumps up above the rest really beautifully displayed, well thought and heartfelt keep us posted to your feelings
Yes, I enjoyed the pace too. And the message really stood out as well, which I really liked. Very truthful, very humanistic. I loved it! :D
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"Our mothers and fathers held us close to their hearts and they promised 'One bright and shining day my children, we will triumph in battle. One bright and shining day my children, we will give you back your wings.' " - PL: S&W
Good Morning Sally, really like this. Although don't have much to add to what has already been said. The rhythm, is intoxicating, as you read, the words roll along to their own beat. I like it when Poems offer a smoothness, and manage to read themselves. This is a perfect example of how words can grab you, draw you in, without it being incredibly complex. The words have stayed with me, and are dancing in my mind as I type, Thank You.
Thank you, everyone :o)....I enjoyed composing this and I DID have a kind of tempo in my mind as I wrote it down. Thank you all SO much for your wonderful comments.
Dreamstress x
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"Sweet is the dream, divinely sweet, when absent souls in fancy meet."
Edgar Allan Poe
