well it's not a limerick :D I thought limericks have only 5 lines not much to chop, either, it's pretty loose already but great post, thanks for not leaving the thread deserted keep at it
leave it to you, m'dear to set the pace on this one! That was great!
Love it. Since Alexe was kind enough to offer a crit, I'm just going to heap on the praise because *sings* It's my forum and I can do what I want to, do what I want to........
~Lady Poe
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Hahaha, Poe, you crack me up! :D Sally, your poem cracked up up as well. Hahaha, lay on the laughs all! :)
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"Our mothers and fathers held us close to their hearts and they promised 'One bright and shining day my children, we will triumph in battle. One bright and shining day my children, we will give you back your wings.' " - PL: S&W
Good Morning Sally, hope all is well. "Ever so slightly" doolally, may not be entirely true! Apart from that, no crit from me. Certainly a warm way to start the Criticism thread!
Good afternoon Slim...all is well thank you....and I trust with you. Ok, ok...I agree..."ever so slightly doolally" might not quite hit the nail on the head but I'm allowed a little poetic licence, aren't I (wink!)
I'm glad everyone enjoyed my little Lumerick (don't ask - hehe!!)
There may be more a-coming!!
Dreamstress X
-- Edited by The Dreamstress at 12:24, 2007-10-13
-- Edited by The Dreamstress at 13:00, 2007-10-13
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"Sweet is the dream, divinely sweet, when absent souls in fancy meet."
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