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This Obsession


*I'm not happy with this one.. it's off the cuff, perhaps I'll come back to tinker with it*

This obsession is no mere child's game
I'm beating each moment with anticipation
Of striking at you with fingernails and biting
my lip until I taste a spot of blood -
oh wouldn't it be joy, to feel you quiver
beneath me?

I'm addicted like any bad junkie
can't get enough of this fixation
and in the empty space when you've gone
to do your own thing, in whatever real world
you live your days in, I'm floundering in a
puddle of so much need and greed.

I get so angry inside, when time ticks too long
and too slow
I feel ire strike up and hammer me with its impatience
I only want to tear into you, my body demanding
full attention - full length attention - as my hands
slip beneath the protection of clothes.

Goddamn it, but I desire you so
and you wouldn't have a better clue, would you?
Than the smile on my face, a simple hello
while inside this head I am taking you on full
throttle, high octane, leaving you drunk.

I wish I could displace myself,
set emotions aside from passion, but when
I look over here, I see you, when I look
over there, there you are.
I am not satisfied, I do not want nor will
I have anything that is not flavored with
you.

This body yearns for your heat.
This mouth burns for your taste
and every fiber of this being hates
each second I have to go without
you.

This obsession is killing me -
a bittersweat addiction and baby,
I'm ready to play the game.

©dragonpoe
9/7/07


-- Edited by Lady Poe at 20:28, 2007-09-07

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Very interesting. Edgy, which I am trying to decide if I like or not. You're very good at it but I'm not sure if it quite fits with the subject. But hey - why are you listening to me?! lol I await your tinkering. :)

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Yeah. I like the edge, which is what I was aiming for, but something's missing. I think it's the grit to go with the edge... I wanted more passion and if came off as more emotion... Not what I was hoping for, ick, guess my brain is on it's own path.
Thank you for being honest, you know I appreciate it, so long as it's gentle hehe
~Lady Poe

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