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My Sunset


Decending in the future
I can see your two souls coming to the end
Two sunsets fading into the distance
One that is smiling at me
The other is sad
The tears that created the rain of fear
As the other lifts my heart away
Slowly going down I can see your end
Your bright future created from the past behind me
I look back into the moon of the past
Darkness covers the sky
It's like my past is coming back to relive again
As the moon reaches high noon, I can hear the dogs howl for me
Fade moon, fade away for me
I shouldn't have the dogs come after me
They bite me with powerful memories of the past
The moon slowly fading away
Hoping for the bright future
Will it ever come again?
I stand and watch for you
Oh stars give me my answer
Twinkling as if they know something
I shall walk toward my future
No more time for me anymore
Maybe if I rest myself it will come
I lay myself to rest
To my never-ending sleep
The angels have taken me to my heaven
High enough to see my bright future once again
Once again for the last time

-- Edited by Johnny Boy at 19:28, 2007-09-05

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I like the symbolism in this piece, the two sunsets, very nice imagery there.

one grammatical issue, where you have "I shouldn't let the dog come after me"
~Lady Poe

-- Edited by Lady Poe at 19:13, 2007-09-05

-- Edited by Lady Poe at 19:14, 2007-09-05

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oh for the love of god I'm going to scream.
Ok this is the 4th time trying to get this damn post to work right.
Fix that sentence! Dog should be dogs. There, since I can't seem to get a post right at the moment, that's all I'm going to say.
Moving on......

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haha sorry poe... doin it now :) thank you for reading

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