I think this is one of your best pieces, beautifully rendered. There's a pleasing clarity to the language and imagery. It has a creative purity which I admire.
I think this is one of your best pieces, beautifully rendered. There's a pleasing clarity to the language and imagery. It has a creative purity which I admire.
Thank you sir. I appreciate your thoughtful comments.
Ahh now you see, this is your sweet, soft and romantic side that I have come to admire and respect! Lovely work, my friend. This is just a gem! ~Lady Poe
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"..I don't care for your fairytales... - Sara Bareilles
Wonderful gem indeed! Lustful, but quiet and sweet. The imagery is beautiful too! :) Lovely job with this treasure. :D
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"Our mothers and fathers held us close to their hearts and they promised 'One bright and shining day my children, we will triumph in battle. One bright and shining day my children, we will give you back your wings.' " - PL: S&W
I like this one too - the "orchid" and "swelling garden" references almost seem to be too purposefully used as metaphor...I'm not entirely sure what I mean, maybe it's the possessive before them instead of an article - try playing around with introducing those nouns in a different way and see how the alternatives feel. Maybe you've already done this. Aside from those two words, I think this piece is absolutely wonderful.
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"Life is too important to be taken seriously" - Oscar Wilde
I think you mentioned him before, but I haven't had a chance to check him out. my favorite line in this has to be "Like a famished butterfly" though - that's so perfectly descriptive.
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"Life is too important to be taken seriously" - Oscar Wilde
