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Lady Poe


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Crying in shatters
Broken and battered
Dear Lord, don't let her slip tonight.


Crushed and drowning
Falling and crawling
She can't find the strength tonight.

Failures and fissures
Cracked, creased and scored
Lying in ribbons on cold, marble floors.

Blood tinged lips
Scraped fingertips
Lost and emotional, oh but tonight!

She only wanted to savor
His aromatic flavor
But fell victim to the silence, tonight.

Pressure, no pleasing
Soul non-appeasing
She looks back over shoulder once more.

Running in darkness
Truth revealed starkness
She tried, Oh Lord she tried, tonight.

Savior not finding
Her hearts unwinding
She's falling again, tonight.

©dragonpoe
7/25/07









-- Edited by Lady Poe at 03:16, 2007-07-26

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Dark, sad, emotional, very you! It pulled on my being, as your poems always do. :) Excellent excellent job! :)

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kutipi2 wrote:

Dark, sad, emotional, very you! It pulled on my being, as your poems always do. :) Excellent excellent job! :)





Hello my lovely!!
I am just thrilled you decided to jump on the bandwagon!!
Thank you very very much for your kindness. This one grabbed me and made me cry when I wrote it.
:)
~Lady Poe

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Awww, tears are good Poe, tears are good. :)

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You've captured the pain and fear of a night alone; of a night with no hope. Impressive and lyrical.



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Thank you very much, my friend!
~Poe

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My favorite part of this poem is the rhythm, hands down. It feels like a waltz, and the one-two-three of it all adds a somber and macabre tone to it. Very nice.

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Thank you, very much. I like the faster paced rhymes, myself, can't always make them work, though, so when I do - makes me happy!!

Again, thank you all.
~Lady Poe

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