Six hours of heaven, tied up within your sheets Delicate aromas lifting my spirit and sending me on a journey where angels roost within cloud-tuft trees of the softest blue and there I saw a world born, violent and ecstatic and realized That it was me.
My tongue yearns to rehash that moment when my last defense slipped to the floor, discarded, kicked under the bed, you stole my breath, inhaling it deep into your lungs and feeding me one delicious kiss after another.
As I created a momument of your body, bowing down to resurrect the god within, I felt a tremor, a budding earthquake. I soared the skies, you realize and having my wings spread so far that I could touch the horizons, I have never felt so free, so beautiful, so totally consumed.
Mmm...wonderful! I love the tenderness and passion in here! And the ending was lovely too. A nice "sigh" kind of moment. Well done! :)
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"Our mothers and fathers held us close to their hearts and they promised 'One bright and shining day my children, we will triumph in battle. One bright and shining day my children, we will give you back your wings.' " - PL: S&W
Very descriptive, you walk me through the content nicely. A neat effect you could look at with this, though, is to shorten the lines or pick up the pacing of the last stanza - I don't want to be walked through the whole thing, pull me along towards the end - if you could get the poem to do that it would be excellent.
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"Life is too important to be taken seriously" - Oscar Wilde
