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sorry i have no title for this one... couldnt think of one... and the fact that there was distraction outside which made this one a bit shorter then what i had in mind... lots of firetrucks and police cars geesh... oh well... here it is... and they keep coming too...





The mean willing man rises to my knees
Looking beyond me I find him very small
The wind blowing from his mouth just couldn't stay away
I find myself here in your home
Even tho im lost
I still look to you for guidance
Can you show me where to go?
Do you even know?
I know my style remembers the old lady by the lake
The blue water colors her outline to my memory
Walking to her I find that my feet are no longer there
I can't seem to put your thoughts together
Blue takes my mind to ease and you are gone
What seems to go along to your life
She calls to me
One by one they find me a home
Birds afraid to show me
I can fall to your knees


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wow
i don't know what to say
this definitely deserves a 2nd read
and another one :D
very creative
very brave notions! bravo!

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thank you very much alexe.... sorry about the missing title LOL maybe i will just call it ????????? LOL oh well

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this is one of your more powerful writes, John... I love that.
Of course, you know me.. I have to pick on something.. I wouldn't be me if I didn't!
We still need to work on those little words of yours... ;)

But all in all... a great write.

It's great to see you writing and not every piece has to have a title.

Kudos, my friend.

Happy Writing.
~Poe

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hehe... pick on me poe i could always depend on that from you :)... thank you very much poe most apreciated :)

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You know me.. I'm a grammatical butthead....

There are a few places where you use "to" mistakingly. Well, in my opinion, mistakingly.......

But I know that you write how you think it, so ignore me if I'm not right :)

~Poe

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haha yeah didnt catch that right away lol.... you know how i am when im in the mood i just wanna get it out and sometimes dont even realize what did til you point it out to me.... thank you will fix it prolly tomorrow if i can remember i read your comment alittle late tonight didnt know you commented back :)

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Johnny, this was very well done for all the reasons stated above. I enjoyed the thoughts and imagery here. :)

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why thank you very much kutipi :)

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